I'm trying my best but...

Oh.

That-- looks tricky.

ouch

Oh nooooo

Would said friend be open to suggestions to improve it?

I love her as a person and apparently she's pretty big in Sherlock fic on Fanfiction.net but it's like yeah... that place...

Her plots actually aren't half bad! Just the writing itself needs help. She writes too much too fast so it's all quantity and no quality...