I'm like... wondering what im missing sort of

but also like just don't know how to do the sample right

what part was asked to be revised?

third person sample

they said it was too short. Can I continue on from what I already have?

(Plurk Paste) Here's what I had in the app

hmm

i'd write a new one

hmmm

ok

it leans towards introspection but you could have more action to it

personally it's a very... aimless stream of consciousness

It's rough cos Seo doesn't really have much going on up top

Yeah tru

3rd person samples should be more like a toplevel than navelgazing

I just couldn't come up with a good premise

Yeah toplevel. Hmmmmmm...........

cake in the rain nah uh post-destroying the entire basketball team

And I just can't take it, cause it took so long to bake it.... ;_;

thats a good promp

thank

It hasn't been that long since Seo played her scho... (Plurk Paste)
ok hows this

this one is better... also i'm laughing...... seo pls

:V

yayyy

woops taller should be shorter im glad i reread be4 post