I just keep asking this, but I really want criticism.

rushes off to go read

I can tell that I'm not the best writer, that my words sometimes could be better, or my pacing could be slower...

So please, any piece would be awesome.

(also, did Mimi insert break your heart? c: )

...Meta.

That was really amazing.

o-oh I see .///.

Thank you

Seriously, I felt that it was paced really well, and the whole plot added a good, further basis for Ruby. The ending was sweet, too. (And I saw that insert/reference! Mimi~)

The only thing that seemed off to me was how Ruby's mother spoke. It seemed a little stiff, but that might just be how I read it.

But really, I enjoyed it greatly.

Ugh, yeah, I missed that...

random_idiot: Care to give it a read? It's about Ruby.

Well, we haven't seen much of her, and she is Norman's wife so...yeah? Yeah.

Like I said, it was more than likely just how I read it. But wow, I'm impressed at this. It's great to see you write more. And I'm really inspired now to write myself.

Well, glad I inspired you! now to get SilvorMoon onto her Ojama King idea.

(Yes, that idea needs to happen~) :3

i'll check this out when i've got a spare moment!